Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or Antarctica. What are the benefits or disadvantages for people who visit such places.

In recent years, a number of tourists are visiting
places
where environments are difficult and
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.
For instance
, the Sahara desert or Antarctica. In my point of view, it has pros and cons for
people
who travel
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places
.
To begin
with, nowadays it is becoming
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common habit among
people
to
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desert
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or cold weather
places
. Well, when it comes to its advantages, first and foremost, it can help them to broaden their horizon.
Furthermore
, it might entail
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their mental and physical health.
Moreover
, individuals might learn
their
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conditions, traditions,
cultures
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, and
also
gain more information about them
due to
seeing
such
places
.
This
is because those dwellings are like travel to sightseeing abodes as well. What is more, it could help
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their children to be
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,
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and
also
can live anywhere without any problems.
Therefore
, the preference of tourists
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changed dramatically.
On the other hand
,
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to these
places
provides
people
with great adventure and gives them a chance to see rare creatures or it might be
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bad situation for some individuals. When it comes to its drawbacks, there are few limitations on
such
expenditure, basically,
people
often need physical and mental preparations in order to visit these locations.
In addition
, there are lots of areas which put
people
's lives
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danger as we never face
to
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them.
For instance
,
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desert is well-known for poisonous rattlesnakes, so we need to take proper precautions before visiting
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these areas.
This
is because we might
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find a hospital to avoid that problem.
To conclude
, trips to isolated areas
such
as deserts, interesting or dangerous or high mountain locations might be beneficial or bad. It is my perception that
people
need to be cautious in any case.
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