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In most successful companies, some people think that communication between employers and workers is the most important factor, while other people say that other factors are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In most successful companies,
while
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 some think that the most crucial element of that success is the communication between the bosses and the employees, some argue that other elements are more important.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and I support that some other factors play a bigger role. Looking
firstly
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 at the reason why communication is considered to be the most important component, people believe that conversation between employers and workers is the key to solving every problem.
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, if the employees are not satisfied with the company’s policies, face-to-face meetings can help them to speak out their thoughts.
As a result
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, their job satisfaction might be significantly improved, which leads to better performance and
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 the team
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reach its goals.
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, many others agree that different factors
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 affect the development of a company. The first key factor of a successful business is the management skill of the leader. There is no wonder that the leader must be proficient in managing and optimizing the efficiency of different departments like Marketing, Sales, and R&D to run a lucrative business. The “people” is another factor that contributes to the prosperity of a company. If the staff are not well qualified, no high-quality products could be launched.
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, neither can the team meet the demands of the customers nor win over their competitors. In conclusion,
although
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 some people argue that conversation between the boss and employee plays the most important role in the success of a company, I believe that other factors
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 as leadership and the human factor are more important.

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task response
The essay shows a clear understanding of the topic and addresses both views effectively. However, the introduction and conclusion could be more strongly presented to enhance the overall structure.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is generally sound, with clear progression from one point to the next. However, the introduction and conclusion could be more explicitly stated to provide a stronger framework for the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Effective communication
  • Job satisfaction
  • Company's goals and values
  • Problem solving
  • Decision-making processes
  • Market adaptability
  • Innovation
  • Leadership quality
  • Visionary leader
  • Supportive corporate culture
  • Inclusivity
  • Employee well-being
  • Productivity
  • Training and development opportunities
  • Corporate success
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