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Some companies and organizations require their employees to wear uniform. what are the advantages and disadvantages of wearinf uniform.

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Some companies and firms of employees have to wear their
companie's
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companies
company's
uniform
. On the one hand,
uniform
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the uniform
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 is
first
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the first
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 and
common
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most common
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 cause
for
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of
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employee's
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employees'
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secure
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security
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.
This
uniform
 is each
companie's
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companies
company's
 sign. All right some company have not
own
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their own
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uniform
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uniforms
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,so their employees do not wear
it
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them
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.
On the other hand
, wearing the same clothes all the time can cause individual problems.
In addition
,
this
uniform
do
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 not appeal to some working staff.
This
 causes problems in their work.
To conclude
, considering the aforementioned points, it can be inferred that each body has two sides so suit codes at work give more positive sides than
its
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their
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 advantages and disadvantages.
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