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The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetatian diet.

The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetatian diet.
The provided graph illustrates the percentage of adolescents in the United Kingdom who followed a vegetarian diet between the years 1960 and 2020. The highest
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 of vegetarians was in the
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 1980, which later dropped significantly between the
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year
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 1990 and 2000. From the
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 1960 to 1980, the
rate
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 of young people who followed a vegetarian diet surged steadily from 0 per cent to 15 per cent, which
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 dropped tremendously to approximately 5 per cent in the
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 1998. Meanwhile, in the
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 ,2000 the
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 of young adults following a vegetation diet spiked back again to about 10
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 and maintained the
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 with minute fluctuations till the end of the
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 2020.

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