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The line graph shows the percentage of people accessing news from 4 sources.

The line graph shows the percentage of people accessing news from 4 sources.
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The line graph shows how the percentage of people receiving news from 4
kind
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 of sources :
TV
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 , newspapers , radio and the
internet
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 has changed
since
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from
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 1995 until 2025 . In general , with the development of
the
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technology , It’s very easy to realize that updating
on
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the
internet
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 has become more and more popular and
this
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 is projected to continue .
However
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 , the another is contrast and the gap between the
Internet
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 and another will surely decrease . In 1995 , the dominant was remained by
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TV
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the TV
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 which took up 70% of residents using
it
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,
this
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 index went down about 10% from 70% to under 60% in 2000 there wasn’t any
change
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 between 2000 and 2010 .
This
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 is expected to continue to decrease to under 50% which is the lowest score
of
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for
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TV
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 in 2025 . Radio and
Newspaper
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Newspapers
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 are almost
same
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the same
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in
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any
years
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year
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. They were regarded
like
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as
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 the second most popular in 1995 and took up about 55% of citizens . They continually decreased between 2000 and 2020 , from 50% to 30% . They are predicted to keep
this
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 index in 2025. The biggest
change
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 is the
Internet
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 which there was no
peole
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people
 using
it
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in 1995 . In 2000 , It wasn’t better than
1995
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in 1995
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 on account of being used by just nearly 1% .
However
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 , from the beginning of
21st
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the 21st
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 century to 2010 , It had a considerable
change
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 from 1% to 30% and
this
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change
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 predicted that The
Internet
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 would gain
dominant
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dominance
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 in near future .
Moreover
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 , from 2010 to 2020 , The
internet
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 increased
about
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by about
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 10% and in 2025 ,It is projected to reach about 57% , higher 7% than the
TV
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 at the same time

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, internet, change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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