What do you think women play good role in progress in society?

Women play a great role in the development and progression of any
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. They are a core part of any community, without their input in making development,
Society
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could not prosperous.
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Women are the first people a child met with, they can shape
up
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how they want to do it. Educated mothers build
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better. They are
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playing their part in vast fields like you could see them in aeronautics flying fighter jets, in deep seas securing borders of their homelands. They try to keep more focus on the task assigned to them
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of their counterparts. Considering their willpower makes them one step ahead. There are lots of parts that are being performed by them better than men. One will count and counting does not come to end. On the whole, we need to look at another side. Adaptation of modern culture
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coming from
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makes them believe that they are above their religious norms. Not listening to their family,
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things on their own making them away from
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. The openness to Western culture will ruin their identity even if they will not be known on their own.
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the good development of
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. Growing up children in their companionship will affect the child’s growth. In conclusion, Women are playing
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in building up a better
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but their gatherings should be kept in mind , are
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accompanied by good ones or bad ones. They will ,
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their company, help in building
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