The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The survey gives information about the long life of a large fish named
salmon
.
Overall
, this
life cycle is comprised from
Change preposition
of
fry
to adult salmon
which take
3 steps and the cycle starts over again.
Correct subject-verb agreement
takes
At
the beginning, baby salmons Change the preposition
In
which
are named Correct pronoun usage
apply
fry
and their length is
from 3 up to 8 cm Change the verb form
are
and
living in a lower river, the water condition is different from other locations and it is fast flowing. Correct word choice
apply
Moreover
, fry
is living there approximately for 4 years. After
this
, fry
turned Correct article usage
the fry
to
Change preposition
into
smolt
which is bigger than Correct article usage
a smolt
fry
and Correct article usage
the fry
also
their length are
12-15 cm. Change the verb form
is
Moreover
, they are heading to open
sea for 5 years. The Correct article usage
the open
last
stage is when the smolt turned to adult salmon
which are almost 60 cm larger and they are prepared to live in an
open sea and relocated to Correct article usage
the
upper
river which has Add an article
the upper
an upper
a
Correct article usage
apply
slow moving
for reproduction for 5-6 Add a hyphen
slow-moving
month
. They spread their Fix the agreement mistake
months
salmon
eggs in the
area which contained a lot of reeds and under Correct article usage
an
small
stone, their eggs will be hidden and the cycle Add an article
a small
the small
start
over againChange the verb form
starts
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, fry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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