The pie charts show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

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The pie charts compare the shares of four different e-commerce retail

sales

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categories,

such

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as travel, film or music, books and clothes in New Zealand in individual years 2003 and 2013.

Overall

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, it can be seen that the proportion of film, music and book

sales

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had increased over the 10-year period,

while

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the travel and clothing sectors were in the opposite position.

According to

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the first chart, in 2003, the online

sales

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of travel industries in New Zealand accounted for 36% of the total sector, which was 12% higher than the clothing sector.

However

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, in 2013, both figures declined dramatically to 29% and 16% respectively. The second chart shows that there was a significant change in entertainment, it is noticed that film/music

sales

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figure had risen sharply by 12% and reached 33% in 2013.

Likewise

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, the online

sales

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of books had increased slightly from 19% in 2003 to 22% in 2013.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

151 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Comparative analysis
E-commerce
Retail sectors
Growth rate
Decade
Decline
Trends
Online transactions
Consumer behavior
Market share
Significant increase/decrease
Digital era
Accessibility
User-friendly platform
Market dynamics
Predictive outlook

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The pie charts show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

A large number of young people cannot find a job when they leave university. What problems will youth unemployment cause for individuals and for society? What measures should take to help reduce unemployment?

Some people think young people are not suitable for important positions in the government，while other people think it is a good idea for young people to take on these positions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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