The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram depicts the
autometic
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automatic
process that
followed
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in Australian cities to convey the
rianwaater
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rainwater
to the
water
suitable for human
ulilise
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utilise
such
as
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drinking.It
clear
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from the graph that the thee
water
undergoes
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through
five
phase
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to
complate
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complete
the procedure .
According to
what is shown at the
commence
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the
water
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collected
colleted
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collected
in huge size reserve.r that
located
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under the residences
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,
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The sky
running
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the
water
flow by the tube that
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fixed
field
alonge houses external walls The
water
will filtred before
reach
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the
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reserve
receiver
.
then
to ensure the
water
clean
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and there
is
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no
microbs
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microbes
microbe
thet
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that
treating
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by adding chemical products .
Cnoseqences
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the pure
water
ready to
suppling
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supplying
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to the
residents
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ar
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houses .
To sum up
, the loge procedure
use
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to enhance the
poeple
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people
healyh
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health
..
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...
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