The graph below shows the different home activities among young children in four different countries.

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The bar chart detail about different home activities among young

children

in four dissimilar countries. Looking from an

overall

perspective it is readily apparent that playing computer games was most popular among young

children

while

reading was the least option in all countries. It is observed that young

one

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from

nigeria

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Nigeria

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are more engaged in digital games with 60%,

while

children

from

malaysia

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Malaysia

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and

sudan

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Sudan

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are

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apply

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even equal for playing computer games figure

represented

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representing

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50%

whereas

little

one

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ones

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from

china

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China

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were slightly lower by 10% respectively .

Interstingly

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Interestingly

it is noticed that youngsters from

malaysia

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Malaysia

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china

nigeria

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Nigeria

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amd

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and

sudan

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Sudan

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were

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apply

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narrowed the disparity for watching television accounted for 30%. Sneak a glance

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the least chosen option by small

children

was reading , where

nigeria

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Nigeria

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and

sudan

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Sudan

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represented

equal

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an equal

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ratio(10%)

while

china

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China

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was at 15% and

malaysia

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Malaysia

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indicate 5% higher than

malaysia

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Malaysia

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Furthermore

board

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the board

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game was popular

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sudan

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Sudan

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at 30

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while

malaysia

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Malaysia

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was

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apply

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slightly decreased by 5% ,

whereas

young

children

from

china

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China

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amd

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and

nigeria

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Nigeria

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were between 10-15% respectively.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, nigeria, malaysia, sudan, china with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

173 words

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The graph below shows the different home activities among young children in four different countries.

Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways rather than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Write a reply to Daisy. In your email, you have to tell her that you really like the photos and the time you got together, describe a problem you had at the airport to her and suggest the time and place for the next trip.

some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some infomation is too important or too valueable to be shared freely.

It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Others say that this is acceptable because fashion is an important part of life. discuss both views and give your own opinion.