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The graphs gives information about the visitors to Cardiff and Dublin from 2010 and 2020

The graphs gives information about the visitors to Cardiff and Dublin from 2010 and 2020
The diagram highlights the information about
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a tourist
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tourist
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 who visited
Cardiff
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 and
Dublin
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 from 2010 to 2020
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,it was clearly noticeable that
visitors
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 to
Cardiff
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was
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increased as by year passed and
completely
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 opposite case was
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 for
visitors
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 who visit
Dublin
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. Let's begin with,
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 to
Dublin
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. In 2011
highest
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the highest
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numbers
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 of people visited
Dublin
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 with the
visitors
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 of almost 3
million
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.
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 in
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was
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seem
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seen
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 in 2014 which holds 2.5
million
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. After that there was
slightly
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 increased in
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 for 3 years, in 2015
visitors
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3
million
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 but after 2017 it gradually
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 down with 2
million
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visitors
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 in 2020. Nextly
Cardiff
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was
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seems to interesting place as
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the number
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 of people increased to visit
Cardiff
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year
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pass
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. It started with almost 1
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of
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people in 2011 which rocketed
with
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 5
million
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of
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visitors
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 in 2020. Particularly from 2011 to 2018 counting of
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 was somewhat similar with 1
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 to 2
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. After 2018 it
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with
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 3
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 and 4
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 respectively.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cardiff, dublin, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rocketed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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