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The chart below shows estimated world literacy rate by region and by gender for the year 2000.

The chart below shows estimated world literacy rate by region and by gender for the year 2000.
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The bar graphs illustrate the
illiteracy
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 rate in 6 different
regions
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 and genders in 2000.
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, it is obvious from the graphs that
females
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 in all 6
regions
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 are less literate than males.
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, people with the highest rate of
illiteracy
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from
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 South Asia,
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 residents of developed countries have the least level of
illiteracy
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. The interesting point is that in all
regions
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 women’s education level is lower than men's.
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, the
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 rate of women in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states, and South Africa ranged from 48% to 55%,
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 uneducated men made up from 29% to 34%.
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, the uneducated proportion of
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 in East Asia/Oceania made up 20% and it was 10 times higher than illiterate
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 in developed countries.
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, the
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 level of males and
females
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 in those
regions
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 constituted 8% and 1%, respectively. One region which had almost similar
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 proportion of both males and
females
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 was Latin America, which made up 10% and 12%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, regions, females with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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