The Chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966, 1986 and 2006.

The Chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966, 1986 and 2006.
The bar graph compares the percentage change in the five
age
categories of
women
with the firstborn baby in Australia in 1966, 1986 and 2006.
Overall
, there
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a steady decrease in the category of young mothers,
while
middle-aged mothers displayed a noticeable growth during the three
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. Mothers with a
first
child at the
age
over
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40
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the lowest category in the whole period of time. In 1966, the highest figures of
women
giving birth to their
first
child were at the
age
under
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19 and 19-24
years
, and constituted
for
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approximately 34% and 62%, respectively. These in that two
age
categories continued
falling
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trend and made up 12% for
women
under 19 and just below 30% for
women
19-24
years
in 2006.
By contrast
, the other two middle-aged categories of
women
with
firstborn
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child
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always had a rising trend. In 1966,
age
groups 30-34 and 34-39 constituted
for
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only around 12% and 8%, respectively. They
then
boomed by almost 4 times, and the
women
with
firstborn
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baby
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in
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the
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age
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30-34 and 34-39 made up 45% and 30%, respectively. Another two
age
groups of
women
giving
a
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first
birth that are over 40 and 25-30
years
had an irregular pattern of rise and fall
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recorded. The birth of
first
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baby
in
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the
age
over
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40 was around 4% in 1966,
then
slightly decreased by 2% in 1986 and
then
it returned to previous levels in 2006. Almost the same trend was in the
age
category between 25 and 30
years
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, women, first, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic changes
  • first-time mothers
  • age bracket
  • fertility rate
  • childbearing age
  • socioeconomic factors
  • educational attainment
  • healthcare advancements
  • family planning
  • societal norms
  • trend analysis
  • delaying motherhood
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