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The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories[ unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home,housework and gardening] describe the information presented below,comparing results for men and women in the categories shown.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories[ unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home,housework and gardening] describe the information presented below,comparing results for men and women in the categories shown.
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The bar graph illustrates the detail regarding the total of
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 married males and females spent per week on unpaid jobs.The data is calibrated in
hours
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.
Overall
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, maximum
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 are spent by married
women
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 with three children
whereas
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 minimum
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 are spent by married men in all three categories. At a fleeting glance,married
women
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 invested a greater number of
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while
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 doing unpaid work which is 60
hours
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 with 3 children.
Moreover
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, the time reduced in doing not paid by married
women
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 with 1-2 juveniles which is 50
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.Surprisingly,the least number of
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 are spent by married
women
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 which is 30
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 without any children.
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,married males spent equal
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 in all three categories which are around 20
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.There is no variation in the number of
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 when married men perform the not paid work.The much work not paid is done by married females with 3 pupils as compared to men
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 as gardening,childcare and housework.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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