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The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories[ unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home,housework and gardening] describe the information presented below,comparing results for men and women in the categories shown.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories[ unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home,housework and gardening] describe the information presented below,comparing results for men and women in the categories shown.
#hours #work #week #people #categories[ #activities #childcare #home #housework #gardening] #information #results #men #women #categories
The bar graph illustrates the detail regarding the total of
hours
 married males and females spent per week on unpaid jobs.The data is calibrated in
hours
.
Overall
, maximum
hours
 are spent by married
women
 with three children
whereas
 minimum
hours
 are spent by married men in all three categories. At a fleeting glance,married
women
 invested a greater number of
hours
while
 doing unpaid work which is 60
hours
 with 3 children.
Moreover
, the time reduced in doing not paid by married
women
 with 1-2 juveniles which is 50
hours
.Surprisingly,the least number of
hours
 are spent by married
women
 which is 30
hours
 without any children.
Furthermore
,married males spent equal
hours
 in all three categories which are around 20
hours
.There is no variation in the number of
hours
 when married men perform the not paid work.The much work not paid is done by married females with 3 pupils as compared to men
such
 as gardening,childcare and housework.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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