The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012.

The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012.
The line graph provides a comparison among 4 categories in terms of the sources of
energy
produced in France over a period of 3 decades.
Overall
, the main feature of the data is that nuclear
power
stations had demonstrated the primary form of electricity over that duration,
however
, using renewables as a
power
source amounted to a negligible number.
Initially
, it is evident that in 1980 thermal
energy
provided the most important means of electricity amounting to over 100 (TW-h),
while
nuclear and hydroelectric
power
started at roughly the same point which is almost 55 (TW per hour).
In addition
, between the period 1980 to 2000 renewables source of
energy
was showing stability. By 1980 nuclear
energy
overtook thermal
power
with a sharp increase reaching a peak in 2005 amounting to just below 450 (TW-h).
In contrast
, thermal
energy
saw a dramatic drop in 1980. It can be clearly seen that over that term hydroelectric
power
remained fluctuating ,
,
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renewables started to soar slightly in the 2000s.
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