The diagrams below show the life cycle of a spieces of a large fish called the salmon. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a spieces of a large fish called the salmon. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
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The drawing below illustrates the
life
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cycle of the
salmon
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, which is a large fish
spieces
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species
.
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an
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life
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of
salmon
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is nine years and their
life
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cycle consists of four main stages: egg, fry, smolt and adult
salmon
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.
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the first three stages take place in fresh water, the
last
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one takes place in saline water. The
life
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cycle begins when
salmon
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eggs are laid among small stones at the base of reeds in the upper part of the river, where the river is slow. After approximately five to six months, the fry which measures three to eight centimetres long can be seen in the water.
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it swims to the lower, faster-flowing part of the river. After growing and feeding there for about four years they reach twelve to fifteen centimetres long and are considered smolts. They
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head to the ocean where they spend around five years there to grow up and they mature into adult
salmon
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which average seventy to seventy-six centimetres long. After which they migrate upstream to their born place to spawn, and the entire journey is repeated all over again.
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