The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In large fish called the
this
picture,this
is the life cycle of speciesChange preposition
of
salmon
.As we knew, the salmon
is type
of Add an article
a type
the type
immigrate
fish, they lived in the water from rivers to the ocean .I will explain Replace the word
immigrant
about
the circle life of the Change preposition
apply
salmon
.
Before the mother salmon
had laid eggs,she had digged
the hole to lay eggs.Each Correct your spelling
dug
eggs
had Change to a singular noun
egg
size
as small as the marbles.After had approved five to six months the egg hatched the fry (baby Correct article usage
a size
salmon
) which had size
from three to eight Correct article usage
a size
centimeters
.They began Change the spelling
centimetres
traveled
to lower rivers.Wrong verb form
travelling
After four
years later, they grew up to smoky which had Change preposition
Four
Correct article usage
a size
size
from twelve to fifteen Fix the agreement mistake
sizes
centimeters
.They went to the ocean, but they would be in danger .Because there were a lot of animals tried to Change the spelling
centimetres
hunting
them like bear, crocodile and the others.They Change the verb
hunt
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
traveled
the long way around the world from Change the spelling
travelled
the
American Latin,Europe,Correct article usage
apply
Africa
to Correct word choice
and Africa
Asian
.After they had Correct your spelling
Asia
traveled
for five years, they grew up Change the spelling
travelled
to
adult Change preposition
into
salmon
.And the circle of life repeated over and over.Submitted by jasmin6pham on
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