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The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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In
this
 picture,
this
 is the life cycle of species
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large fish called the
salmon
.As we knew, the
salmon
 is
type
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a type
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 of
immigrate
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 fish, they lived in the water from rivers to the ocean .I will explain
about
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the circle life of the
salmon
. Before the mother
salmon
 had laid eggs,she had
digged
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dug
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 the hole to lay eggs.Each
eggs
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egg
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 had
size
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a size
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 as small as the marbles.After had approved five to six months the egg hatched the fry (baby
salmon
) which had
size
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a size
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 from three to eight
centimeters
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centimetres
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.They began
traveled
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travelling
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 to lower rivers.
After four
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Four
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 years later, they grew up to smoky which had
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a size
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size
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sizes
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 from twelve to fifteen
centimeters
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centimetres
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.They went to the ocean, but they would be in danger .Because there were a lot of animals tried to
hunting
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hunt
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 them like bear, crocodile and the others.They
were
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traveled
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travelled
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 the long way around the world from
the
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American Latin,Europe,
Africa
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and Africa
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 to
Asian
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Asia
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.After they had
traveled
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travelled
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 for five years, they grew up
to
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into
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 adult
salmon
.And the circle of life repeated over and over.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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