The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiyon, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiyon, and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pictures compare the layout of the Norbiyon industrial area at present and possible changes in the future.
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it is clear that
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the whole area will be developed into a place which is suitable for living,at the same time ,more roads and public buildings will be added.
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,We can see from the first map that there are only several factories in
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place right now, alongside a circular road and a footpath,and they are planned to be totally replaced by houses next.
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,two more streets are designed to lead off the big circle,and a small circular track is
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been considered to connect all the ways together.
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,a playground and a school,
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a medical centre and shops,
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as well as
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a medical centre and shops are panned in
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area. Meanwhile,Farmland on the other side of the river is considered to move eastward,so that more housing space is available.Of course,a new bridge is necessary to link both sides together.
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