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The chart below shows the proportion of energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.

The chart below shows the proportion of energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.
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The given pie charts provide information about the
energy
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 produced by a country using 6 difficult sources from 1985 to 2003. In general, the main source from which the
energy
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 was produced was oil with
52
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% contribution in 1985.
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, in 2003 oil contributed 39%
in
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of
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energy
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 production. But compared to 1985 the
reliability
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 of natural gas to manufacture
energy
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 increased from 1% to 4% and 8% to 13% respectively.
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,
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reliability
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the reliability
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 to manufacture
energy
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 on nuclear was 22% in 1985 which
reduced
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was reduced
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 to 17% by 2003.
While
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 the
reliability
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on
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of
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 most of the resources fluctuated, the
reliability
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on
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of
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 hydrogen remained constant
4
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at 4
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%.
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 from 1985 to 2003 oil stayed the main source of
energy
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 production and other renewable resources remained the least.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, reliability with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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