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The diagrams below show two methods of using water to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show two methods of using water to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate two ways of getting electricity from
water
 movements. Each of them has identical parts as
spindle
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the spindle
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 and turbine, but the process is quite different. The first method is the hydroelectric dam, which has a gate with
width
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a width
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 and angle of
pensock
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penstock
 that speeds
water
 up.
To begin
 the process,
water
releases
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is releases
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 from the reservoir through the gate.
Then
 it gets inside the pipe and directly enters the part of
machine
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the machine
a machine
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 with
turbine
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the turbine
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 and
spindle
.
Water
 flow rotates the
spindle
 and gives power to the generator that converts
this
 into electricity. After that, electricity conducts through
poer
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power
 lines.
Finally
,
water
 is
realeased
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released
 into
river
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the river
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. The second method is
wave-air
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a wave-air
the wave-air
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 generator.
This
 machine
in
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,in
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 particular, consists of two chambers.
Water
 enters the lower part and pushes air up.
Then
, the part of air gets into the upper chamber and creates wind flow,
wich
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which
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 moves
spindle
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the spindle
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 and turbine.
Following
this
 generator produces power energy. The
last
 step of
this
 process is air escapes from the machine.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, spindle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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