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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps reveal changes on
Island
 based on tourist facilities.
It is clear that
 one of the main development on the
island
 is building infrastructure. Before the
island
 did not have any buildings to attract tourists. The main goal of change is developing tourism on the
island
. The
island
 has been developed by manufacturing ,which involves building homes, a restaurant, a pier and a reception.
Furthermore
, there were laid a footpath and a vehicle track. The footpath will run from the restaurant and will finish at the pier.
Moreover
, on the
island
was
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built more than ten residence buildings and yachts for tourists. Before the
island
 had only
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a
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few trees and
the
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 beach, now the number of trees did not
have
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any
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changes,
whereas
 the beach is applicable for swimming . The accommodations were built on different sides of the
island
,
in
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and in
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 the middle of the home were
also
 manufactured reception and restaurant.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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