The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided table illustrates the percentage of the number of attendees to arts events in 20

years

in the UK.

Overall

, it can be clearly seen from the table that, the

people

who attended just to see their favourite artist have the highest per cent in all periods,

while

those who went for business have the lowest number.

To begin

with, those who went to see a performer 20

years

were 58%,

then

years

ago 55%, but today they are 56%.

Secondly

, regarding the

people

accompanying their children, it’s clear to see that 20

years

ago just was 9%, 10

years

ago, 15% but today they are risen to reach 24%.

Moreover

, there were 27% of

people

attended because had a special occasion for 20

years

, and the next year after year the percentage decreased to 9% nowadays. In the

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

end we have some

people

attending arts events for work, the number increased

according to

the data, 6% in the past and 11% in the

last

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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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