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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend

#friend #advice #college #job
Dear Alex, For your letter about my recommendation for your choice about the
wheather
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weather
 to take get a job in other to urgently meet up with your
dailu
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daily
 and family
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demands
, or go to college for a degree As a childhood
friend
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, we have
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always
 helped
ond
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one
 another on many occasions, especially
where
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 tough decisions like
this
 are needed. I know you need to support your family, so you want to financially equip yourself and assist them, but getting a college degree isn't just an immediate solution but a progressive and valuable step towards a bright future. Getting a degree now can guarantee better jobs and a progressive future
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 the ladder of life. Once you have gone through the four walls of a school, you make the decisions on what job you want and you
also
 dictate your salary
while
 you stand a chance to lead those without educational certificates. I want you to get the student loan that was introduced by the new government to help you through the three years of
studies
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.
This
 will eliminate the burden
from
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 your family as they will not bear the tuition cost. Once you graduate, your support for them can be endless because you are likely to change from one job to another based on your preference or higher pay. My life has never been the same since I graduated and I believe it can be
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same for you. I hope you won't trash my suggestions. Best
mishes
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wishes
meshes
!
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Juncture
  • Firsthand
  • Practical skills
  • Theoretical focus
  • Financial independence
  • Career advancement
  • Real-world experience
  • Part-time studies
  • Online courses
  • Financial stability
  • Career goals
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