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The diagrams below show the development of a small fishing village and its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort.

The diagrams below show the development of a small fishing village and its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort.
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The pictures illustrate the layout of development in
fishing
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village
 in 1974 and 2004.
It is clear that
 the main changes of the
village
 became a resort for tourists. A
big
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large
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 number of
attraction
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attractions
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 were built in the fishing
village
. In 1974, the
village
 only had 12,000 people, forest and some kind of household were the main activities of citizens in
a
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daily life.
However
, after 30 years, the population of the
village
 dramatically
grown
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at
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to
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 nearly 80,000 citizens.
Also
, there were
at
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about 50,000 tourists.
Secondly
, the main cause of
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the increase
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increase
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the increase
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in
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of
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in
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 the number of people
is
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in
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 the new
building
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buildings
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 and attractions
such
 as a golf course, a beach, hotels, tourist shops and so on. In 2004,
instead
 of woodland,
according to
 the layout
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,
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there were built the golf course.
However
,
original
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the original
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 fishing buildings did not
experienced
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experience
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 any changes. What about the
household
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households
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 like olives, sheep and goats were replaced ,
instead
of
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apply
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them
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the
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 people have manufactured a farm which
provide
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provides
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 the hotels with products like fruits and vegetables.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, instead".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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