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It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together.

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In recent years
families
last
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lost
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 their emotional connection with each other.
This
 essay will discuss the main reasons
of
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for
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this
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this relationship
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relationships
 among
families
 and propose possible solutions to decrease the number of
such
families
. One of the main reasons for
such
 bad
relationships
 is a lack of interest
to
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in
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children from their
parents
.
In other words
, nowadays
parents
 do not provide enough attention and support to their offspring, as they are at work
their
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the
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 whole time. In
this
 case in general the dominant numbers of the family could not notice if their kids had any moral issues.
Secondly
, some
parents
 do not listen to their children. As a rule, they pay
significantly
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attention to their marks at school.
This
 is the reason many children are unheard
and
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 unloved since their
parents
 are focused on the child’s success.
As a result
, a child
becomes with
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has
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 psychological issues and in some cases especially teens tend to do some wrongdoings to draw the attention of their closest people,
parents
. It may significantly influence on child’s future. Spending more time together is the key to good
relationships
 and the atmosphere in the family.
Families
 should provide any
team building
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activities that will connect each member's family.
For example
,
sport
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games
such
 as volleyball, football, and basketball are
a
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apply
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good variants of team games.
Furthermore
, they should discuss the problems with each other
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with
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no negative emotions and try to understand each other.
To sum
up
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 all stated above, the main solution to bad
relationships
 in
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a
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family is spending time together and understanding each other.
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Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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