It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together.

In recent years
families
last
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lost
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their emotional connection with each other.
This
essay will discuss the main reasons
of
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this
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this relationship
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relationships
among
families
and propose possible solutions to decrease the number of
such
families
. One of the main reasons for
such
bad
relationships
is a lack of interest
to
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children from their
parents
.
In other words
, nowadays
parents
do not provide enough attention and support to their offspring, as they are at work
their
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whole time. In
this
case in general the dominant numbers of the family could not notice if their kids had any moral issues.
Secondly
, some
parents
do not listen to their children. As a rule, they pay
significantly
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attention to their marks at school.
This
is the reason many children are unheard
and
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unloved since their
parents
are focused on the child’s success.
As a result
, a child
becomes with
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psychological issues and in some cases especially teens tend to do some wrongdoings to draw the attention of their closest people,
parents
. It may significantly influence on child’s future. Spending more time together is the key to good
relationships
and the atmosphere in the family.
Families
should provide any
team building
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activities that will connect each member's family.
For example
,
sport
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games
such
as volleyball, football, and basketball are
a
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apply
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good variants of team games.
Furthermore
, they should discuss the problems with each other
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no negative emotions and try to understand each other.
To sum
up
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all stated above, the main solution to bad
relationships
in
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a
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family is spending time together and understanding each other.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • family interactions
  • technological advancements
  • virtual interactions
  • dual-income households
  • urbanization
  • migration
  • social structures
  • individualism
  • family cohesiveness
  • belonging
  • open communication
  • emotional support
  • shared activities
  • family dynamics
  • work-life balance
  • family traditions
  • regular gatherings
  • counseling
  • family therapy
  • prioritizing family time
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