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Today family members do not eat meals together. Why does this happen? Is this a positive or negative development Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, families do not have a meal at one table and experts are trying to find out a reason for
this
. Personally, I believe that it affects negatively
for
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reationships
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relationships
. In the subsequent paragraphs,
this
 essay shall see my thoughts.
To begin
 with, there are several reasons why I argue with the following topic.
Firstly
, it affects the
duation
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duration
 of the marriage and leads to
divorce
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 of
parents
.
For example
,
they
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if they
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 do not talk
each
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 other and their mindset will change. After that, they are not like-minded people.
Secondly
, it may cause
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a break
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break up
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break-up
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 between
parents
 and child, because of not paying attention to
child's
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the child's
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 breeding.
Therefore
,
parents
, who
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 a lot, should pay
at
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 least 30 minutes
for
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 their kids.
Finally
, it
also
 takes out happy times of family,
that is
, they spend their leisure
time
 without family. Households should always be together and help each other. If there is no connection between brothers,
these kind
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 of relationships will be
reason
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the reason
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 for
argue
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of
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 them. So, family members should contact increasingly together. To illustrate,
me
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 and my brother had not
spend
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 a
lot
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time
 together because of my study.
That days
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, we could not have common ideas and quickly
quarreled
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.
However
, in summer, we came to
peaceful
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 life. It shows that people should spend more and more
time
 with their
parents
 and care about them. In conclusion,
this
 essay argues about family relationships. In my opinion, either
parents
 or kids should pay some
time
for
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 their close people, at least they should eat together.
Submitted by 29th of april on

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