The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men andwomen in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men andwomen in different age groups who did regular physical activity in

2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the percentage of
Australian
men
and
women
in various
age
groups who exercised in 2010 by gender. With the exception of those between the ages of 15 and 24, more
Australian
men
than
women
exercised in 2010. In 2010, 52.8% of
Australian
women
aged 15 to 24 exercised, placing them best among all
age
groups. The percentage of
Australian
males who exercised at the same
ages
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was 47.7%. Females aged 45–54 and 55–64 who exercised in 2010 showed similar trends, with 42.2% and 43.1%, respectively, being lower than the average for
men
of the same
age
group by roughly 10%. The difference between male and female participation in regular physical exercise reached 12% among those aged 35 to 44 in 2010. At a total of 39.5%, the
women
's figure at
this
age
was the lowest of all ages. The proportion of
Australian
men
and
women
who exercised was similar in the population 65 years and older; the males reached 47.1%, which was slightly higher than the percentage of
women
(0.4%).
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