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The bar chart below shows the top countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar graph illustrates the sum of electricity production and consumption in ten
countries
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, whose highest in total, by the year 2014. These
countries
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 can be divided into three groups. The first
group
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 had more than one thousand
billion
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kWh
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 of electricity,
then
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 the moderate
group
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 with numbers between 500 and 1000
billion
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kWh
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, and
lastly
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, the
group
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 of 500
billion
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kWh
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. There was a huge gap in electricity supply and usage numbers between the first
group
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 with the rest of the evaluated
countries
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. The contrast was even bigger for China and United
Statw
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State
States
. With nearly triple the amount, when compares to the third
group
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. With regards to all
countries
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' data, the majority have a sufficient amount to cover their public demand, except for Germany. They had a shortage of at least 50
billion
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kWh
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.
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, the United States have the largest remaining electric power of approximately 270
billion
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kWh
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, group, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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