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A lot of people spend a major part of their adult life at work, so job satisfaction is very important for individual happiness. What are the main factors that contribute to job satisfaction? What are the possible solutions for people who are unsatisfied with their jobs?

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One of the most important factors in
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 is
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 satisfaction
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 because it will make a
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 able to produce better and develop himself, especially for young people for whom
work
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 is an important part of their lives. In
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 essay, I will discuss the problems and develop practical solutions to achieve personal happiness at
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. On the one hand,
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 satisfaction is keenly necessary for the worker to do his
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 better and thrive in it.
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 is what will make him advance and innovate. But in some cases, if the
person
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 is forced to
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 because he does not accept his field, he will depressed.
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, a
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 works
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, but he
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is passionates
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 the field of sports and he wants to be a football player.
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, his performance will not be as required.
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, co-workers and the boss have a great influence on comfort at
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A research
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 has been done by Mohammed Fuad about functional environment ، the results were totally shocking. He found It is possible for a
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 to leave his
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 and become frustrated because of mistreatment or pressure from colleagues, and some of them did industrial action.
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, despite these problems, they can be solved by
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human learning how to reconcile his
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 with what he is passionate about.
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, a
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 can do his basic
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, whatever it is, and after working hours he does what he loves and will be creative in it, and by
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 he will have earned money and done what he
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likes. More significantly, companies should conduct awareness lectures on how to deal with employees and how to create a suitable and convenient working environment for all. Workers must be
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 and friendly to each other.
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, having been a teacher for several years, I am aware that
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 satisfaction can be achieved through a good workplace and a boss who motivates his employees to develop themselves and the place.
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