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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today.
Given are on the maps illustrate how to changes in 2008 and today in
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science
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the science
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park
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.
Overall
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,as can be seen from the graph that the most crucial changes in 2008 , offices and reception
situated
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were situated
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 northeast corner.There are a lot of places in the
science
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park
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 .
for example
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IT
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the IT
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centre
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 and Cyber security located opposite . The railway
past
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passed
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 in
their
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there
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while
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 the trees sited behind the IT
centre
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 . The Car
park
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 placed in the heart of the
science
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park
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 and
also
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 business units was in front of
car
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the car
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park
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 .there
are
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is
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 grassland northwest
in
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of
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science
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the science
a science
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park
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 At
the
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apply
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presently
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present
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,
firstly
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 research and development appeared
instead
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 of grassland and
also
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fro m
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from
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 reception
to
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of
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the univercity
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univercity
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university
 hub altered .
Car
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The car
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park
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 and business units are not changed .
Innovation
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The innovation
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centre
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constructed
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was constructed
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instead
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 of
IT
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the IT
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centre
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 and
also
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 station
built
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was built
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 between
Innovation
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the Innovation
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centre
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 and cyber security . Cycle path came into view in the
science
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park
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, instead".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words science, park, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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