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Universities should provide students with the skills they will require to succeed at their future. How far do you agree or disagree with the above opinion? What are some of the skills that employers look for new employees?

#universities #students #skills #future #employers #employees
Nowadays, universities should provide
curriculum
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 to build
students
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students'
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skills
 that they will need to satisfy their
career
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 in the future.
Along with
 increasing the number of
job
 seekers, I feel that it is really essential for
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a student
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student
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students
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 to have specific knowledge and
skills
 to survive in their occupation.
Besides
 basic
skills
 that
students
 have that
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 to their
education
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 background, lots of
soft-
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skills
such
 as
leadership
 and public speaking are crucial to
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in
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 new employees.
Firstly
, the growth of fresh graduates who seek
for
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a
job
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are significantly go
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 up year by year
that
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 challenging for
students
 to have their own
skills
 to be noticed by companies.
For example
, many economics graduates as the increasing of
economics
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 department in universities, which
make
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 the competition to get a
job
 becoming harder. So,
the
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companies will require sophisticated
skills
such
 as marketing and communication to sort
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 the best candidate for their business.
Thus
,
besides
 providing
good
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 curriculum about the main course,
university
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the university
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 should have
the
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 program to build
students
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skills
 that they will need after graduation.
In addition
 to
this
, there are many
skills
 that
students
 must have to
success
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 in their
career
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careers
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.
Leadership
 and public speaking
skills
,
for example
, are crucial to satisfy their jobs. As we know that a lot of
occupation
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occupations
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 use
team work
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 modes to do the
job
 lists. So, it is important to have
leadership
skill
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skills
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 to manage the team to gain the
employees
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employee's
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 goals.
Furthermore
, to successfully
delivering
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the
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 idea in
presentation
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 or meeting, it
is require
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 the ability
in
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 public speaking. It is crystal clear that these two-fold
skills
are
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really matters as professional that
it
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must learn by the
students
 in their colleges. It can be concluded that universities should provide
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a program
the program
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program
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programs
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 to build
skills
 that
students
 need in their future life in terms of competitive worlds.
Leadership
 and public speaking, both, is necessary to support
student’s
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students’
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 future jobs. I
thus
 hope these ideas are useful for
college
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the college
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 to take action as soon as possible.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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