You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart below, depicts, in the year 2009, the
activity
of men and women during the evening time. The courses taken into consideration are 4, namely Drama, Painting, Sculpture and Language;
While
the range of age is between 20 to 50 or over. From an
overall
perspective, it's evident that the course with the highest percentage is language, with a major participation from elderly ladies.
To begin
with, a
case
of Drama hobby
,
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illustrates the participation of 10
people
, regarding men and double
result
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the result
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for the
case
of the girls. Following with, the course of Painting, its percentage is a bit higher with respect to the previous
case
, yet it shows 30 gusts for the female's category and 25
people
for the
case
of the men. Successively, is the turn for the
activity
of Sculpture, which apparently, it looks like, nobody really enjoys and found funny pleasure to participate; Here is the reason why the percentages are quite low, or rather 5% and 10%.
In addition
, the majority of
people
who decide to attempt
activity
during dinner time for the generation over 50.
To sum up
, what has already been stated, analysed and compared, it's relevant to highlight the factor that, growing up with the age,
people
being already retired, they dedicate themselves to participating in some
activity
, compared to those who are at a young age, can still do many things.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words activity, case, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attendance
  • adult education centre
  • participants
  • demographics
  • evening courses
  • language course
  • art course
  • participation rates
  • gender distribution
  • age group
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • summarise
  • highlight
  • analyze
  • popularity
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