You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Worker often have to retire at the age of 60 or 65. However, some people say that they should be allowed to continue working for as long as they want. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Today,some
people
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taht
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that
worker
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workers
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often have to retire at the age of 60 or 65.
However
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,other
people
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say that they should be allowed to continue working for as long as they want.
This
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essay will show you my opinion about
this
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and give reasons for my answer and include any relevant examples from my own knowledge or experience. On the one hand , there are several
reason
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that
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why I
shuld
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should
be allowed to continue working for as long as they want. There are some benefits for older
people
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.The most main reason is
taht
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that
older get a lot of money.We can get
pension
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by
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government
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.
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it is low,so older
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are difficult to want to do in life.So,if older
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working
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,they can get income,and they can want to
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itdo
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.
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as,
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to travel,
eat
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delicaus
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delicious
foods and
buy
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a lot of
someting
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something
.So older
people
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can spend more fun time.
Second
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reason is
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health.It
is often say
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allmost
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almost
older
people
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increase
parcentage
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percentage
that
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ill when
retire
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work
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beacouse
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because
they decrease
time
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the time
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that they are moving,and they do not talk with
peopleFor
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people for
example,older
people
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become
easily
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to
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forget things.
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, single older
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die cause of
retire
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work,and
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older
people
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are difficult to talk with
thire frents
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their friends
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a smart
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smart phone
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,so working is one way to
communication
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communicate
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.So,older
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people
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people's
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health are improve if do not retire
work
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from work
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. In
counclsion
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conclusion
, older
people
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should be allowed to
contiue
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continue
because there are several benefits for older
people
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.In the
futer
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future
,more and more older
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trend
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tend
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to
working
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work
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retirement age
  • prolonged employment
  • skills gap
  • inclusive workplace
  • youth employment opportunities
  • health concerns
  • continuous training
  • personal autonomy
  • financial readiness
  • pension systems
  • demographic changes
  • labor market
  • intergenerational knowledge transfer
  • mentorship programs
  • workplace adaptations
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