Many people today are worried about ‘cybercrime’ such as hacking and identity theft. What problems does ‘cybercrime’ cause, and what solutions can you suggest for ordinary people and businesses to take? Give reasons for your answer, and provide ideas and examples from your own experience. You should write at least 250 words.
In
this
modern era, where technology is sophisticated and up-to-dated
, people and companies often face Correct your spelling
up-to-date
to
cybercrime. Change preposition
apply
Therefore
, hacking can cause huge loss
of money and fraud that should be solved.
Fix the agreement mistake
losses
To begin
with, social media become extremely popular and people tend to share confidential information like location
, their passport, Correct pronoun usage
their location
driver
license, Change noun form
driver's
ID
cards. Unfortunately, Correct word choice
and ID
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the person
a person
person
who shared private documents cannot detect hackers to prevent hacking. Fix the agreement mistake
people
Consequently
, they are likely to face designing fake documents, stealing
money from cards Correct word choice
and stealing
by
unknown strangers for unpleased purposes. Basically, any number, photo, Change preposition
from
location
Correct word choice
or location
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
published
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is published
in
Internet cannot be disappeared. So, it is a widespread problem for individuals, particularly for businesses. Change preposition
on
Moreover
, datas
could Correct your spelling
data
stolen
from anti-secured websites Change the verb form
be stolen
where
usually Correct word choice
which
has
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apply
Add an article
a warning
warning
that Fix the agreement mistake
warnings
ignored
by Add a missing verb
are ignored
majority
since they don’t care about consequences and continue to enterAdd an article
the majority
in
.
To overcome Change preposition
apply
this
problem, government
should focus on Add an article
the government
secure
system and start to translate Add an article
a secure
such
cases on TV, radio, advertisements
. So, society will start to filter what can be published and vice versa. Correct word choice
and advertisements
Also
, complicate
codes, Replace the word
complicated
passwords
Correct word choice
and passwords
that
include confidential materials, especially for cards which Correct pronoun usage
apply
has
deposits to save themselves safe. Change the verb form
have
Furthermore
, businesses should pay attention on
security and trust Change preposition
to
this
deal to
professionals. Change preposition
with
In addition
, youths tend to share their private life to
people Change preposition
with
who
they never met because of their unknowledge Correct pronoun usage
whom
about
fraud. To prevent it, parents may control kids by Change preposition
of
parent’s
controlling programs and be aware of kids’ Change noun form
parent
action
.
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actions
To conclude
, hacking is well-known
kind of crime where hackers work with codes and numbers to use them Correct article usage
a well-known
in
evil intentions. Change preposition
for
Hence
, it is in our hands to be careful and use difficult passwords to prevent unexpected situations.Submitted by bolatovnaa01 on
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