Figures show that some countries have an ever increasing proportion of the population who are aged 15 or younger . What do you think are the current and future effects of this trend for those countries.

Some demographic surveys have shown that the proportions of young people are rising rapidly.
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reasons
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as illiteracy and poverty or wars or any other reasons.
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essay shall delve into the immediate and long-term outcomes of
this
trend
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those
countries
. The most important current impact of
such
a trend would be on the national economy.
For instance
, goods and services would need to be imported, which would lead to an unstable economy.
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addition to the effects on
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, there would be social implications
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also
. The young population has
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of energy, which must be
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in the right direction, or it would lead to crime and violence in society. The government will have to invest a lot
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educational institutes, as more children need more schools
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and colleges
. ln addition more spending on
health
would
also
be needed.
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If
careful management of
such
a situation is done by the government,
for instance
, by providing good education and
health
facilities,
then
the future outcomes could be quite positive. The long-term result would be that the education and
health
infrastructure would be well developed. The society would be younger and more vibrant. The culture of those
countries
would be more fast-paced than the traditional culture
However
, in case the present time is not managed nicely,
then
the future effect would be different as there would be more people within the country needing employment.
Then
there might arise the problem of unemployment. Unemployment invariably leads to petty crime and violence. Summing up, the long-term effects of having more young people
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on how the
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situation
is handled today.
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If
handled well, the culture and lifestyle of these
countries
would be transformed if the population
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younger. Fresh opportunities and challenges would both be on the way. The trend would cause multiple possible effects and these
countries
should strengthen the education and
health
infrastructure to overcome its negative influence
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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