Task 1 - Me: The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1 - Me: The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the different sources of total police
fund
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funds
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in a section of the United Kingdom,
while
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the pie charts compare how the money was spent
on
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in 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, there was an increase in the police budget of the area in
UK
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the UK
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, and the
amount
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of salaries paid for national
staffs
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went out.
However
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, the expense
for
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of
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building and transport
was remained
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stable over
two
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the two
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years surveyed. Looking at the table, the majority of
budget
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the budget
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came from National Government, contributing 175.5m in 2017, compared to 91.2m for Local Taxes. After one year, police witnessed
a
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slight growth in the Government source to 177.8m;
likewise
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, Local Taxes
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rose significantly to 102.3m. Around 38m
was remained
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for other sources within two years. In other graphs, in the first
year
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the percentage of
staffs’
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salaries was reported 75%, the highest expenditure,
whereas
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only 8% of
total
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the total
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was spent on Technology.
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, there was a slight decrease in Salaries to 69% in 2018,
while
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the amount of expense for technology
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rose dramatically to 14%. Only 17% of
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the fund
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fund
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funds
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was used for public
facinities
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facilities
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maintained in both years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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