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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 believe that it is better to live with
climate
change
 than to fight
aginst
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against
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 it. I
also
 believe that it is necessary to adapt to the whims of nature.
Climate
change
 has been a concern of many
countries
 for many years. Especially negative factors
such
 as global warming and
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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 effect in the next few years are worrying the
people
 of the world and they are developing various measures to prevent it. Among others, we can take the Paris Convention adopted in 2015. About 200
countries
 are its members. Others
people
 think that it is better to find ways to adapt to
climate
change
 than to prevent it. Because the
climate
 and nature have been changing for centuries,
and
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apply
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people
, animals and plants have been adapting to it.
For example
,
as a result
 of global warming, there is a risk of flooding some
countries
.
Therefore
,
countries
 should evacuate the population to higher areas and find ways to grow plants that grow in a watery environment. It is
also
 possible to build a floating town on the water. In conclusion, I believe that it is more important to find ways to adapt to
climate
change
 than to spend a lot of money and time on preventing it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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