The diagram shows how rain water is harvested for consumption of water in a Australian town
The diagram illustrates how rainwater is harvested and treated for
consumption
in an Australian town.
Overall
, the water
is collected from the roof and processed with chemicals and passes through filters making it fit for consumption
.
The water
from the roofs of houses is collected using gutters, preventing it from sweeping down. This
water
then
passes through the pipes to the drainage system, consequently
passed
through the filters to remove the dirt. Wrong verb form
passing
Then
this
water
is stored in storage units.
Proceeding, this
water
is treated using chemicals which are not toxic for consumption
. This
helps to kill the germs and bacteria in the water
before send to housing units for consumption
. This
treated water
travels through pipes to individual houses in the town and is used for daily household purposes and consumption
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