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This line graph recorded the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018,

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This
 line graph recorded the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions. It illustrates two different lines: one is staying on the cruises and another is staying on the island, and a combined number collectively. In the total numbers, it is apparent that increase steadily from the original 1
million
 to 3.5
million
, especially with significant growth during 2016. As same the
travelers
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 remained on the ship, in the first two years, it indicates a marginal fluctuation.
However
, the latter with a stable rise to 2017, reached 2
million
. In terms of tourists who stayed on the island, compared to the other two lines, it didn’t record
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 rise, only between 2011 and 201, accounting for more than one
million
’s roar.
While
 it stayed at a plateau in the following 5 years, even shows a slice decrease in 2016, constituting 1.5
million
 people.
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