It is better for people to be unemployed than being employed with a job they do not enjoy. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought that being employed with a compelling and undesirable
job
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worse
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is worse
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than being unemployed in terms of individuals. I mostly disagree with
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suggestion because
for
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those who are
being
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jobless have more
problems
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in terms of psychological and
economical
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economic
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in comparison to the rest.
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, individuals who are unemployed may suffer psychological
issues
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.
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,
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employed ones have complaints about their
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, unemployed ones demand their
problems
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because they feel useless and need some activities. In the absence of a particular
job
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, they may become lazier and more depressed gradually. To illustrate that, many unemployed characters may give up waking up early in time and they do not face
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their situation.
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, they may blame themselves even
they
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if they
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have not any
failure
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. In short, they usually do not be happy in these situations more than others who have some
issues
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in their business lives.
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, jobless individuals probably have some economic
issues
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. They do not obtain money to meet their needs and they feel inadequate
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others earn even though they have
problems
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. Their sufferings usually excel undesirable
problems
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in business life and they opt to work
bad
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in bad
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circumstances
instead
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of being jobless.
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, many people in Turkey are working in unsatisfied jobs and they avoid being unemployed because they
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that probable economic
issue
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issues
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may create other
issues
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. In
short
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due to
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its
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the
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economic and
likelihood
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the likelihood
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problems
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of problems
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in future, being employed in a problematic situation is better than being unemployed.
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,
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causes and examples can be multiplied with
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suggestion.
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,
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unattractive
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the unattractive
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ambience and situation of a
job
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lets people
to thinking
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for
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of
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being unemployed, in my opinion, it is a harsher circumstance for employed ones
due to
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its psychological and
economical
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economic
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burdens. 44 dk.
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task response
Your essay addresses the topic but lacks a clear stance on the issue. It is important to clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the prompt. Make sure to present a clear argument with relevant examples to support your stance.
coherence and cohesion
The essay displays a logical sequence of ideas and uses linking words and phrases effectively. However, it would benefit from a clearer introduction and conclusion to better frame the discussion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Job satisfaction
  • Mental and emotional well-being
  • Stress
  • Depression
  • Financial instability
  • Quality of life
  • Job dissatisfaction
  • Career goals
  • Skills and experiences
  • Networking opportunities
  • Social isolation
  • Productivity
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