It is better for people to be unemployed than being employed with a job they do not enjoy. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is thought that being employed with a compelling and undesirable
job
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worse
than being unemployed in terms of individuals. I mostly disagree with Add a missing verb
is worse
this
suggestion because Linking Words
for
those who are Change preposition
apply
being
jobless have more Verb problem
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problems
in terms of psychological and Use synonyms
economical
in comparison to the rest.
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economic
Firstly
, individuals who are unemployed may suffer psychological Linking Words
issues
. Use synonyms
Although
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,
employed ones have complaints about their Remove the comma
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job
, unemployed ones demand their Use synonyms
problems
because they feel useless and need some activities. In the absence of a particular Use synonyms
job
, they may become lazier and more depressed gradually. To illustrate that, many unemployed characters may give up waking up early in time and they do not face Use synonyms
with
their situation. Change preposition
apply
In addition
, they may blame themselves even Linking Words
they
have not any Correct word choice
if they
failure
. In short, they usually do not be happy in these situations more than others who have some Fix the agreement mistake
failures
issues
in their business lives.
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Secondly
, jobless individuals probably have some economic Linking Words
issues
. They do not obtain money to meet their needs and they feel inadequate Use synonyms
while
others earn even though they have Linking Words
problems
. Their sufferings usually excel undesirable Use synonyms
problems
in business life and they opt to work Use synonyms
bad
circumstances Change preposition
in bad
instead
of being jobless. Linking Words
For instance
, many people in Turkey are working in unsatisfied jobs and they avoid being unemployed because they Linking Words
acknowledged
that probable economic Wrong verb form
acknowledge
issue
may create other Fix the agreement mistake
issues
issues
. In Use synonyms
short
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short,
due to
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its
economic and Change the word
the
likelihood
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the likelihood
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problems
in future, being employed in a problematic situation is better than being unemployed.
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of problems
To sum up
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,
causes and examples can be multiplied with Remove the comma
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this
suggestion. Linking Words
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,
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unattractive
ambience and situation of a Correct article usage
the unattractive
job
lets people Use synonyms
to thinking
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think
for
being unemployed, in my opinion, it is a harsher circumstance for employed ones Change preposition
of
due to
its psychological and Linking Words
economical
burdens. 44 dk.Replace the word
economic
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task response
Your essay addresses the topic but lacks a clear stance on the issue. It is important to clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the prompt. Make sure to present a clear argument with relevant examples to support your stance.
coherence and cohesion
The essay displays a logical sequence of ideas and uses linking words and phrases effectively. However, it would benefit from a clearer introduction and conclusion to better frame the discussion.