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The graph below gives information from Annual Energy Outlook 2008 about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030

The graph below gives information from Annual Energy Outlook 2008 about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030
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The line chart depicts the history
as well as
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 the estimation of annual
energy
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 consumption commencing from 1980 and ending in 2030 in the united states of America,
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that petrol and oil
energy
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 are more consumed throughout the given period compared to nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower
energy
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, Glancing at the line chart reveals that petrol and oil
energy
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 was the first demanded source of
energy
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 and will remain the top one, between 1980 and 1995 showed a slight up-downs and upwards, right
after
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this
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 year, a gradual increase started with roughly 35
quadrillions
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 till 2020, afterwards the consumption will illustrate a continuous rise till 2030 to reach exactly 50
quadrillions
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, in the meanwhile the three sources of
energy
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such
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 as Nuclear, solar, and hydropower were the least consumed with nearly 5
quadrillions
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 in 1980
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, the estimation shows a fractional uplift throughout the projection ,
whereas
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, the coal and natural gas came in the second stage, in the contrast, the coal
energy
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 showed a considerable increase from 1980 with just above 15
quadrillions
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 to reach its peak in 2030 with exactly 30
quadrillions
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,
while
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 natural gas will consent a steady rate between 2010 and 2030 with 20
quadrillions
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,
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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