n increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

There is no doubt these days that
overall
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plastic
surgery. The question is why the figure of individuals tends to change their body appearance.In
this
,
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I am going to list the aetiology of
this
phenomenon and discuss both
drawback
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and
bright
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side
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of it . Howe ever, modification or changing human body matter has
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causes
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.
Firstly
,
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famous people
such
as actors or singers play
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critical role in
this
subject . In other
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, they always demonstrate the fake beauty picture and
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on the external appearance through
plastic
surgeries.
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, the availabilities and affordable of
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cosmetic medical procedures in the major of countries , because the number of individuals
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their body has
been
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rocketed . In terms of positive
of
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cosmetic operations . The main reason given to support the claim is that
,
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when
plastic
procedures employ to repair or solve crucial or critical health problems . To illustrate . if
some one
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used to repair the nose bone after
car
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accident.
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the negative aspect is when the people became
have
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the same
face
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features to be more specific when the girl asked to make my face like that beautiful actor . In conclusion,
although
the argument
according to
cosmetic operation .
Therefore
, I believe must improve the nation's
awernence
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emergence
and recognize
this
matter and when we can do
plastic
surgery.
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