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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #changes #birth #death #rates #zealand #summarise #features #comparisons
The given line graph illustrates the statistical information, regarding
to
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birth
 and
death
 rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101. The units are measured in
thousands
.
Overall
, it is clearly indicated that both above-mentioned factors are experienced
dramatic
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 increase.
To begin
 with, at the beginning of the
period
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 the mark of
birth
 rate
was
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accounted for 20
thousands
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thousand
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 of people,
while
 the index of
death
 was made for 10
thousands
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thousand
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 of citizens. After that, there was a sharply grow in
birth
 and in 1961 hit a peak, with
the
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 index of about 65
thousands
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 of people. Having some fluctuation, close to 2021
this
 indicator fell to 52, approximately and
this
 trend of
birth
 is going to
be continue
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 until the end of the period. Turning to the
death
 rates, it can be seen that there was a constant increase from 1901 to 2001.
Following
this
, it
had
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experienced a
drammatic
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dramatic
 tise to 2021 and it is supposed that
growing
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the growing
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 process will keep
to
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until
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 2051.
Then
 the mark of
death
 will be stable
to
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until
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 the end of the given period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, thousands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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