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Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

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Many people prefer to watch foreign
films
 rather than locally produced
films
. In the
21th
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 century,
that
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quite a lot of habitants
to
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watch foreign cinema more than
locally
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films
.
This
 essay
illustrate
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 that, problem of watching traffic congestion and solution that trade experience Locally producers and foreign. At the
first,
the problem is not so new and is common in many countries. The film's quality is the key factor in why consumers
favor
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 foreign
films
. In many nations, it is frequently observed that locally produced movies lack stronger narratives and characters with the requisite depth to elicit strong emotional responses from viewers.
This
 is
due to
 the fact that major film companies, like Hollywood, may set aside a sizable budget and have skilled producers and directors, but movies made in developing nations have a modest budget and few talented directors. Viewers are discouraged from seeing local
films
 in most developing nations
due to
 the subpar acting and low production values. In the following
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 we talk about
solution
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our
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 problems. On the surface, the solution appears to be that nothing new has to be created because what now exists is sufficient. It is vital to bring in retired foreign experts who will assist
ours
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 in order to accomplish
this
.
also
 to invest in the modern equipment
that is
 required rather than producing movies with outdated equipment. Naturally, money is needed for all of
this
, so I believe it's ideal to provide our studios with subsidies that result in movie rental revenue. In conclusion,
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locally
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 problem watch international
films
instead
 than domestic ones will be suggested
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Cinematic expertise
  • Diverse narratives
  • Enriching cultural experience
  • Linguistic proficiency
  • Cinematography advancements
  • Government subsidies
  • Promote local talent
  • Economic sustainability
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