The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
The diagram gives detailed information about the collection of rainwater and how it is being processed for drinking in a town in Australia.
Overall
, it is observed that after collection, the water
undergoes filtration and other processes before it is sent back to be used in the households.
To begin
, when it rains, water
gets into the gutter, flows into and through the drain to various houses the
town , Change preposition
in the
then
is filtered by a water
filter ,then
it is sent into a storage tank, which acts as a reservoir.
Furthermore
, the water
is sent for treatment .chemicals are introduced into the tank to treat the water
to make it safe for use, and finally
, the treated water
is redistributed into the houses, where it can be used. Individuals can access the water
by turning on their taps.Submitted by leahjosh2 on
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