The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.

The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
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The diagram gives detailed information about the collection of rainwater and how it is being processed for drinking in a town in Australia.
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, it is observed that after collection, the
water
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undergoes filtration and other processes before it is sent back to be used in the households.
To begin
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, when it rains,
water
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gets into the gutter, flows into and through the drain to various houses
the
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town ,
then
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is filtered by a
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filter ,
then
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it is sent into a storage tank, which acts as a reservoir.
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, the
water
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is sent for treatment .chemicals are introduced into the tank to treat the
water
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to make it safe for use, and
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, the treated
water
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is redistributed into the houses, where it can be used. Individuals can access the
water
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by turning on their taps.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rainwater harvesting
  • rooftops
  • drains and gutters
  • underground storage tanks
  • water treatment plant
  • purification
  • filtration
  • chemical treatment
  • impurities
  • microorganisms
  • distribution system
  • potable water
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