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The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.
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 data about the number of
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 each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.There are three different schools.They are primary,lower secondary and upper
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secondary
. Looking at the graph as a whole,
upper
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secondery
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secondary
 was the most spent time in four different countries.As you can see,
usa
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 population is large so the proportion of
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 is
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countires
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countries
 but the rate of
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USA
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 is
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 than the number of upper
secondery
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secondary
 in Japan. In detail,the proportion of upper
secoundery
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secondary
 at just under 1100
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USA
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,it is the highest proportion in the graph.Japan is the smallest
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of
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 the number of
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 each teacher spent teaching in different schools.In
adition
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addition
 primary and lower secondary in Iceland remained
all
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most constant at around 600
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.
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 countries increase in older to primary, lower secondary and upper
secoundery
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secondary
.In
USA
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 and Iceland
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at
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 about 300
hours
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 between primary and upper
secoundery
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secondary
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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