Atomic energy is becoming more and more popular energy source. However, some people argue that nuclear power puts life on the Earth to danger. What is your opinion?

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Due to
fast technical development atomic
energy
is becoming more and more popular.
However
, some people argue that nuclear power puts life on Earth at risk. I do not think so. My take on
this
is that nuclear
energy
is not only safe for humanity, but
also
it is environmentally friendly.
Firstly
, it is much safer than most of society thinks.
For instance
, everyone around the world has heard about the explosion at Chornobyl's nuclear station, but it is only one of all the stations.
Moreover
,
this
explosion made scientists think about the risks and improve the technology to be safer. So, there is no point
to be
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afraid of nuclear
energy
and suppose that it can turn our Earth to ashes.
Secondly
, it is not only harmless to the environment, but
also
it is the most effective way of producing
energy
.
For example
, the technology of producing
energy
out of coal is less effective and affects harmfully on nature.
While atomic
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energy
is almost fully environmentally friendly and one nuclear station can produce
a
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twice bigger amount of
energy
than
the
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coal one. In
foreseeable
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future, atomic
energy
might be a perfect replacement for coal
energy
. In a nutshell, nuclear technologies are developing every day and becoming less harmful and more effective every day. If there
have
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not been some accidents with it, we would not
reach
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such
a massive upgrade in the technology. And there is no doubt that someday it will fully replace the old traditional sources of
energy
.
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Task Response
Provide a clearer position and supporting arguments for the opinion on atomic energy. Use more diverse and specific examples to support your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph connects logically to the next, and use transitional phrases to improve coherence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear fission
  • Radioactive
  • Renewable energy
  • Decommissioning
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Emissions
  • Waste management
  • Energy security
  • Sustainable
  • Meltdown
  • Containment
  • Half-life
  • Nuclear proliferation
  • Clean energy
  • Risk assessment
  • Safety protocols
  • Energy crisis
  • Ecological footprint
  • Natural disaster
  • Energy transition
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