It has been said that the world is becoming a global village in which there are no boundaries to trade and communication. Do the benefits of globalisation outweigh the drawbacks?
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village
in which trade and communication have no boundaries and Use synonyms
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can bring some advantages. Fix the agreement mistake
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Firstly
, the price of many products would decrease and Linking Words
people
can afford them. Because we are all in the same Use synonyms
country
, there would be no Use synonyms
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For instance
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in which there are no Use synonyms
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could live in peace with their family.
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people
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government
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, so the number of crimes would raise significantly. Linking Words
Finally
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people
think that it would be extremely boring if the Use synonyms
world
is united. There are many cultures in the Use synonyms
world
and the culture presents the Use synonyms
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, so the Use synonyms
world
should be divided into many Use synonyms
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can preserve their culture. Use synonyms
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and you can experience the same things in your local area.
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in
becoming a global Change preposition
to
village
. But the disadvantages outweigh the advantages and I personally think that the Use synonyms
world
is wonderful and interesting because there are a Use synonyms
lot
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countries
and cultures to make Use synonyms
people
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be
curious and want to discover more.Unnecessary verb
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