It has been said that the world is becoming a global village in which there are no boundaries to trade and communication. Do the benefits of globalisation outweigh the drawbacks?
When I was a child, I wondered
that
if all parts of the Correct word choice
what
world
is united and become a single village
, what would happen? I know there are a lot of people
like me having the same question and in this
essay
we are going to discuss Add a comma
,essay
about
Remove the preposition
apply
this
idea.
On the one
hand. A global village
in which trade and communication have no boundaries and limit
can bring some advantages. Fix the agreement mistake
limits
Firstly
, the price of many products would decrease and people
can afford them. Because we are all in the same country
, there would be no taxs
Correct your spelling
tax
taxes
in
exporting. Change preposition
on
For instance
, the price of rice in Vietnam is very cheap about one
thousand dollars per ton, but when exporting to other countries
, the cost of one
ton of rice can go up to two or three thousand dollars. In addition
, we would have only one
currency, so people
could go anywhere without exchanging the
money. Correct article usage
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Finally
, there are no wars
among countries
because all parts of the world
are united. We witnessed many big wars
in the past such
as World
War 1 and World
War 2 and the victims of these two wars
are still suffered till
today. So it is crucial that we should make Change preposition
apply
this
suffer
never happens again by becoming a global Change the form of the verb
suffering
village
in which there are no wars
and people
could live in peace with their family.
On the other hand
, There
are some drawbacks Fix capitalization
there
about
Change preposition
to
an
united Change the article
a
world
. Firstly
, all the power is in the hand of government
. Because there Correct article usage
the government
are
only Change the verb form
is
one
government in a country
, so
they can do whatever they want and in the worst case, they are bad Correct word choice
apply
people
, the world
will be suffered and become a real hell. For example
, they can raise some kinds of tax
and corruption will happen more frequently. In Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
addtition
, Correct your spelling
addition
government
would find it really hard to manage a big Add an article
the government
country
like this
, so the number of crimes would raise significantly. Finally
, people
think that it would be extremely boring if the world
is united. There are many cultures in the world
and the culture presents the country
, so the world
should be divided into many countries
, this
way people
in their country
can preserve their culture. In addition
, people
would not travel aboard because there is only one
world
and you can experience the same things in your local area.
In conclusion, there are some benefits in
becoming a global Change preposition
to
village
. But the disadvantages outweigh the advantages and I personally think that the world
is wonderful and interesting because there are a lot
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oflot
countries
and cultures to make people
be
curious and want to discover more.Unnecessary verb
apply
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