Which do you prefer: a high-paying job with long hours or a lower-paying job with shorter hours? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Most people without a doubt will attempt to find
the
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a
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job
that
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where
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they can earn a lot of money.
However
, I find a
job
with
lower-paying
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the lower-paying
a lower-paying
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job
with shorter
work
time
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times
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more suitable than a high-paying one with
extended
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an extended
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work
period.
First,
long
hours
of
work
may lead to stress, tiredness and physical burnout, which will most definitely affect your daily life. You will not have the
time
to rest and as the result, will affect your workflow,
while
shorter
work
time
will be less stressful. You can have
time
to hang out with your friends, go to
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a cafe
the cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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,
sitting
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sit
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and
chatting
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chat
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, etc.
Secondly
, working
continously
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continuously
with no breaks can
also
affect your way of thinking, reduce creativity,
drastically
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and drastically
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lowering
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lower
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your performance.
However
, short
hours
of
work
comes with little money, which may leave you
many
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with many
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struggles with finances, bills, and tax.
This
isn't a problem
to
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for
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most of the people who worked for a longer
time
, because they are more freely
about
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with
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money than those who worked less. In my opinion, I'd prefer a lower-paying
job
with shorter
hours
than a high-paying
job
with long
hours
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • career growth
  • financial stability
  • mental health
  • stress levels
  • burnout
  • job satisfaction
  • standard of living
  • social relationships
  • retirement planning
  • personal development
  • time management
  • opportunity cost
  • trade-offs
  • quality of life
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