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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

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Nowadays, there are more and more students which are highly qualified
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 are not under contract.
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society and particularly for young adults that doing
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studies
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their studies
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 to be ready for
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 world. In my opinion, there are factors that can explain
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determination, motivation and
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subjects.
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, it is commonly believed that these students are perhaps not looking
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 a job. Most
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graduates
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 have the willingness to learn about different cultures and want to discover the world.
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 step, some of them have difficulties
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 back
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reality.
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, at a job interview, it will be hardest for travellers to show their motivation and determination than a recent graduate.
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, the rate of employment depends on the subject. Some
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 not a lot of opportunity as compared to
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 one. It is argued to believe that when you choose your
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, you have to reflect
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future perspectives. To illustrate, some subjects will be less and less useful in the next years
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 evolution. Many jobs will be
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 and companies will not search
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humans
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 capacities. It will be cheaper for them to use new technology. In conclusion, it's a big part of life to make the choice of
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 before it and after of course. Your future job will be influenced by important decisions like that. When you decide
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studies
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, you need to reflect
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 innovative aspects.
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